Attached are the two examples of work you assessed during the lesson today. Your are aiming to improve the second piece (the letter) for WAFs 5,6 and 7. You should write the paragraph out in your homelearning books.
WAF 5 Sentence structures should be varied and should have an impact on the reader.
WAF 6 There should be a range of punctuation used to good effect. It should be accurate and have an impact on the way we read the piece.
WAF 7 There should be a range of effective vocabulary including explicit adjectives, verbs and adverbs.