Year 11 –
Some better pieces of Writing being produced. Still, I must emphasise the need to work to time constraints; whether this is keeping to a quick 5-10 minute plan, or to leaving time enough to proofread. This section of the exam is too important to lose marks/time unnecessarily.
For tomorrow, please ensure you produce a redraft of your writing piece – one that you feel will get you the highest possible mark.
I am still not a widespread use of connectives between paragraphs; when reviewing your piece, consider how you might use a different (connective) word at the beginning of each paragraph.
Punctuation – ensure you’re varying this; whether it is employing the odd semi-colon or simply ensuring you are using commas (or using brackets to add detail).
I want you to try and beat your previous score, and show real progress.